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----------- by !Barkshaw:iconBarkshaw:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Experimental > Other


I am spent

I re-invent my head

cynical teeth remember when they last bit down apon the apple



adam once said that his innocence was dead
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Submitted: Jan 19, 2007
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~Sister-Sleep:iconSister-Sleep: Feb 5, 2007, 3:23:23 PM
I love this - the simplicity of it, and the strength of the last line. It resonates. Often using lower case letters a lot in powtry makes it feel weaker - but in this poem it's good... it almost hints at the weakness of man.

Or at least, that's how I interpret it. I'll shut up now. ^^

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He's a boy, you wanna girl so tear off his cock, ties his hair in bunches, fuck him, call him Rita if you want,
~alovernotafighter:iconalovernotafighter: Feb 13, 2007, 1:56:30 AM
I like this because it's simple. As ~Sister-Sleep said, there is strength in the last line. Lovely.

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Damn you non-conformist conformists!
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You'll like this person...
~alovernotafighter
!Barkshaw:iconBarkshaw: Feb 13, 2007, 3:52:38 AM
thank you both for the comments
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